Do you, like your mama, do you like your daddy, do you especially, like your grandpappy, cause if you dont, call this nimber, 1-800-naughty-brother, I'll come over and put you on my shoulder, oh no, you got caught by the po pos, my sons in jail, my dad smokes, my moms real cool but sometimes she chokes, we play cops and robbers night and day, we play and play and play but you don't even know what to say cause I ain't even there anyway.

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You call that rap I call that crap. You have to put your rhymes to the rhythm. Bust your lyrics to the beat. Other wise it is just words that aren't verbally heard. Calling that a rap is absurd. In an abstract sense it is poetry following a basic aa bb rhyme pattern. But rapping like that will leave you bruised and battered. Because to evolve as a lyricist you have to actually spit this. If not you better quit this quickly. If you keep up these doctor Seuss rhymes we will be forced to evict thee. You try which for that I give you props. But the problem is your not even good enough to be a hobbyist so pack up your bags I suggest that you quit, you talentless ****. MC Tron OUT

No offense just showing you how a real rap would be phrased, rap is usually attacking so none of these are aimed at you

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The title of the thread is somewhat misleading.
I was actually expecting to hear some recording of you attempting to rap, not just reading lyrics.

No offense Mctron, but why did you quote yourself?

Also, RandyErin, a beat would be clearer if you typed your raps in verse.

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Who else just glanced over this and thought it said "My first crap"?

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Biggest run-on sentence I've ever seen.

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It could be better, but when you read the lyrics to any song usually they ain't the best, hearing you rap these would of been better than just seeing the words, but for a first rap this is pretty good just remember that practice makes perfect, and don't give up

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I thought this was going to have a rapper raping and a tune -_-...
But its good. I should probably make a rap.
Watch yo mopin ! Do yo shopin ! Goin to da streets ,and mah feet are shockin !...
Something like that

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No offense, but this is meh.

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This gif is better

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Was expecting a recorded song, but still meh imo.

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I was just joking,abc -_-
My lyrics sucked
I would NEVER post my real raps(if I'd have some) here. Some one else could rob them and get famous .LOL

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